Well I have to say, kittens, that I really enjoyed tonight’s chapters. Despite of some of the complaints that I’ll get into later, I have to say it made me smile. And I didn’t think it was going to at first. When the chapter began with an improptu visit from Christian’s mom I thought we were about to segue into total cornball territory. But surprisingly, the visit was short and it gave us just enough to know that he 1– didn’t spring from his father’s forehead, 2– he wasn’t born from midichlorians (I had a theory) or 3– his mom wasn’t some cold hearted, blueblood bitch. The latter would have been such a damn cliche. And it might prove me wrong later. As you know, I’m talking about the chapters as I read– so I’m not done yet. I have to say I’m starting to enjoy the relationship between Christian and Ana, but it’s mostly due to the believeability of Grey. Of course, I’m a girl, so perhaps I’m too hard on Ana, but her language and decisions are just so juvenile. But his dialogue is great. Just the right amount of flirtation and innuendo coupled with that intimidating seriousness. And the author does a really great job of making us feel that intimidation. See– I do think she has some talent as a writer, lest you think I’m just trashing the whole thing. Notice I continue to read…
And on to the complaint department…
1. Shut up you inner fucking goddess. Now the voices in her head are doing the lotus position and jumping up and down! WTF?!!? I’m all for inner dialogue, but enough already!!
2. Team Jacob/ Team Edward, thinly veiled. Does anyone else think that Jose’s character is a little too Jacob Black? My theory? We changed Jacob to Jose and made him Hispanic rather than Native American. Because Portland has such a HUGE Hispanic population….
3. The contract. Now, in a contemporary BDSM novel it is commonplace to show the negotiation between the Dominant and submissive. Some even believe that it’s the responsibility of the author to show this as an educational tool. You want people to be safe if they decide to try any of the BDSM play mentioned in the book. So you show negotiation, rules, talk about safewords, etc. And I have to say– James does a FANTASTIC job of emphasizing the safety involved in this type of relationship. But did we need to read the ENTIRE TEN PAGES OF THE CONTRACT WORD FOR WORD?! Just excerpts would have sufficed and the length was very tiresome. This is where an editor could have stepped in and gotten it under control.
But overall, tonight I really enjoyed the chapters. Perhaps I’ve been drawn in a little more this time. Who knows, but it made me want to keep reading. Stay tuned, faithful readers, for tomorrow I plan to give you my thoughts AND a few things to read that are similar to 50 Shades but BETTER. Cuz I know that now you’ve had a taste of the BDSM Erotic Romance, you’ll be hungry for more…
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